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The Autumn Child ([personal profile] sharpeningthebones) wrote in [community profile] rainbowfic2013-02-07 12:12 pm

Halloween Orange

Name: Charley
Story: Ad The Devil Makes Three
Colors: Halloween Orange - You can't unmake your own mistakes
Word Count: 214
Rating: PG
Warnings: None
Notes: istan on Percival before they were well...Tristan and Percival. This is set pre-everythig really.


He shot at the target with a precision that came from years of practice. The gun was steady i his hands ad he didn't flinch for eve a second as he fired round after round.

It wasn't helping, not even remotely. The simple fact was that no matter how may bullets he went through, no matter how many people fell at his hands, his brother was still dead. He failed at the one thing he swore he would never falter at, he failed ad now he had to learn to move on, to live without him, to fight without him at his back.

He wasn't sure that was even possible.

But there was nothing to be done, was there? No way to go back, to fix what had been done. Not even angels have the ability to go back in time, no matter what they might otherwise wish.

And yet, he new the story didn't end this way, new that somewhere his brother was being reborn, was being let in a human shell.

The gears in his brain started turning and he set down the gun, taking a deep breath.

Maybe he couldn't fix things, maybe he couldn't reverse time, but there\s still a possibility he may have a second chance all the same.
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[personal profile] bookblather 2013-02-08 06:42 am (UTC)(link)
Awww, that ending. I like that movement towards positivity, even under the morass of grief.
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[personal profile] kay_brooke 2013-02-11 08:30 pm (UTC)(link)
He's at least trying to stay positive? Sort of? Better than drowning in his grief, even if he is a little scary with how focused he is on his second chance.
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[personal profile] dark_kana 2013-02-12 06:00 pm (UTC)(link)
So sad... So much pain and grief.
But I like the note of positivity at the end! Everyone deserves a second chance.
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[personal profile] clare_dragonfly 2013-02-20 01:25 am (UTC)(link)
This is great--I love how he seems to be just trying to get stress relief at the beginning, but the shooting actually helps him work through things and figure out that he might not have permanently lost his brother after all.

Also, I used this post for your suggestion, an example of my editing style! I haven't linked it yet because I want your approval first, but here's the post: http://kaitlynrmiller.wordpress.com/2013/02/20/examples/
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[personal profile] clare_dragonfly 2013-02-20 05:36 pm (UTC)(link)
Hoorays!