Blue Caravan #8, Cloudy Gray #5, Psychedelic Purple #13: Rice as soft as spring clouds (LMN Series)

[ilthit]

Name: Rice as soft as spring clouds

Story: The Lin Moniao Series
Colors: Blue Caravan #8 (Soon as this wall in my heart comes down, I'm gonna make it feel like home), Cloudy Gray #5 (mollify), Psychedelic Purple #13 (I wish you were mine)
Supplies and Styles: frame, gesso; fingerpainting, miniature, photography, silhouette
Word Count: 29
Rating: general
Warnings: The character is self-deprecating. The poet is emulating an untranslatable style in a language they don't speak.
Summary: Four lines of poetry from the point of view of Shen Shanwei, about Lin Moniao.
Note: The best thing about this poem is that it inspired Minutia to write a short story with two more poems, and that story was awesome. But alas not up anywhere yet, alas.

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Rice as soft as spring clouds,
sharp sauce to entice the tongue,
still tastes bitter in a jealous man's mouth.
If my beloved has no faults, I invent some.

Comments

[thisbluespirit]

Oh, nice! V evocative in v few words.

[bookblather]

Oooh, this is clever. It reads like some of the Japanese poetry translations I've read.

[ilthit]

That's not so surprising, considering it's a non-Chinese speaker trying to emulate Song Dynasty quatrain style based on Wikipedia. XD