Neon 9: Moving On

[bookblather]

Author: Kat
Title: Moving On
Story: In The Heart
Colors: Neon 9 (new item) with Kelly's paint-by-numbers (Lars and Danny took long enough to realize they're one.)
Supplies and Materials: Novelty beads (Anna Begins, Counting Crows), pastels (one night stand), stain (There are lots of ways of being miserable, but there's only one way of being comfortable, and that is to stop running round after happiness. - Edith Wharton), oils (official recognition), feathers (your character meets someone with a bad reputation).
Word Count: 200ish
Rating: PG-13.
Summary: Moving on.
Warnings: None.
Notes: An attempt to do a poem for two voices; please let me know if the formatting messes up.


she's got a fabulous ass

he's kinda cute for a nerdy guy

i like the way she talks

i like the way he smiles

and god her eyes

but no fucking way that is ever gonna work

leave it alone

leave me alone

she's not into you, they never are

i don't want to be into you

no way

no time

no heart for it

moving on.

he's a nice guy

she's a great girl

he's a good friend

she's a good friend

why fuck it up?

not like i can't get laid

not like i can't get a nice girl

walk into a bar, show some skin

someone you'd take home to mother

ask 'want to fuck me' and just like that

or father, i guess, or, who am i kidding, chrissy for sure

or there's always a vibrator

chrissy doesn't like the bad girls

why fuck it up?

moving on.

so here's the thing

i hate this

you're all i think about, all the time

when did you become indespensible

you're not a bad girl, not really

when did you take my heart away

you're the kindest person i've ever met

give it back, damn you

you're everything to me

i hate this i hate you

i love you

i love you

i hate you

and what's all this, but my stupid heart

and what's all this but a stupid game

if this is love i want no part of it

moving on.

i can't take this anymore

i can't take wanting anymore

haul you over the table

kiss her kiss her like you never want to stop

i don't want to stop

don't stop

don't want to start

don't stop

don't stop

i don't know what this is

i don't know what we have

who are we, together

what are we, together

i don't know what this is

i don't know why this is

does it matter?

moving on.

Comments

[isana]

It works. The formatting's great here, and Danny and Lars are so distinctive apart from each other. Also, liking how that last moving on seems to be them moving on together and not apart anymore. Great job!

[bookblather]

Awesome, thanks so much! That was what I was mostly going for, I think, that gradual coming together and blending in the last line.

[leia_solo]

This was awesome!

[bookblather]

Thank you!

[sarcasticsra]

This is really, really awesome! I love your poetry, and I love things that play around with format, and I love Danny/Lars, so this basically just combines a bunch of things I love. It's incredible. Well done.

[bookblather]

Thank you very much! I'm glad it hit all your buttons. <3

[subluxate]

I love this. It works so damn well. Danny is so fragile, but so is Lars in his way, and they're both so different from each other but fit so well. Brilliantly done.

[bookblather]

Exactly! I heard someone describing it once as "the ragged edges of your soul match the ragged edges of mine." They're different, but they fit together perfectly.

Thank you!