You do such a great job keeping in Jay's limited, childish perspective while providing the reader with enough cues to piece together the bits that are going over her head.
“You give yourself?” Jay looked at her, at her pale skin and her trembling hands. Heard the way her breath came quicker as if she wasn’t drawing in quite enough air. “Does it give anything back?”
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“You give yourself?” Jay looked at her, at her pale skin and her trembling hands. Heard the way her breath came quicker as if she wasn’t drawing in quite enough air. “Does it give anything back?”
This was creepy in the most awesome way.