Awesome, awesome. I can see that. The first bit's kind of a thick lump, and if I had the energy, it would've done with a significant rewrite to the structure. And I do keep bouncing in and out of Dmitry's head in this, which probably doesn't help.

The speech pattern thing is something I've noticed myself. Dmitry is my oldest character and I've had a lot more practice writing him; Peace is next, of the characters in AGT. I was considering doing some Canvas/side-story stuff specifically about Diana to get in her head, so maybe focusing on that for all the major characters would be useful.

Again, thank you!