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Shipwreck Light ([personal profile] shipwreck_light) wrote in [community profile] rainbowfic 2013-07-04 10:24 pm (UTC)

That's fine! Middle of things and all. BUT, if you wanted to...

-More uses of their names
-Maybe some cousin/coz/using each other's names in the dialogue
-Brief introductions around (maybe mention Jael is there because Fara begged? That does change the dynamic between the two from what I thought).
-Scene otherwise of them being domestic before departing, for referring to

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