That's fine! Middle of things and all. BUT, if you wanted to...
-More uses of their names -Maybe some cousin/coz/using each other's names in the dialogue -Brief introductions around (maybe mention Jael is there because Fara begged? That does change the dynamic between the two from what I thought). -Scene otherwise of them being domestic before departing, for referring to
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-More uses of their names
-Maybe some cousin/coz/using each other's names in the dialogue
-Brief introductions around (maybe mention Jael is there because Fara begged? That does change the dynamic between the two from what I thought).
-Scene otherwise of them being domestic before departing, for referring to